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omfgjonneedshim.....
made me think of LOST's future "Hole"So, we know what the black goo is. Cool. Is the thing after them? Probably.
Yuuuum. I'm dying because each chapter I read I think, "No, it's ending soon, no!"
My only problem: How did Sarah know the little kid (kyle jr.) was with them, if she wasn't really the thing crawling out of the cave 60-or-so chapters back? (Didn't she deny torturing Jon?) I just don't see how she knew O.o But, knowing me, I probably missed something. eee....This is all so good.
*gasp* she wouldn't...She's going to risk her life so that Jon can have Kyle? Awwwww, *hugs Sarah* Okay, after all of this, I do like Sarah, She's overall a nice person who cares and would do anything for Jon. But then I have to remember that Jon is going to be all drugged up on this stuff again, so I'm wondering how he'll react to Kyle. Or what he'll believe he's seeing...it should be VERY interesting. I love how you explained what the Opal was though, finally I understand. And you mentioned the boy!
Really can't wait to read the next Brad! That was a kickass ending! Great job!
~Rieda