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Ah, talkative old women. Classic. Yay, things are falling into place! I'm so behind. I really must catch up on these episodes.
No real comments here. This chapter didn't do much for me except to offer a little insight into the character of Sarah. She's nice, but a fairly typical beautiful-girl figure.
I understood the biology references! I know what ATP and apoptosis are!
Colleen
This was wonderful. There's that thing with Kyle and Sarah and that thing with Kyle and Jon and that thing with Kyle and______everyone else! I think you're putting the story together great. And the way you end these posts every time is just___ inspirational! I love it! Keep writing. Love ya!
Yeah, no complaints. I liked it.
I can see everything falling into place. The cell phone, the punch, the picture, the silence. It's falling together better then you think; the average reader would have gotten to this quick enough to ignore what ever imagined errors you think are in the beginning. It's good, Brad, It really is
I thought the old lady was her mom but... I have reading problems.
I'd point out all the little things I liked, but I feel I might be getting a little...annoying? lol. And, It's too late. I should really be in bed, trying to sleep.