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Nice switch that Jon doesn't end up rescheduling his meeting. Hmm, I suppose this would make alot more sense had I read "Ch" (yeah, don't know how to spell it...) I also liked how their emotions were presented: so that the reader isn't told exactly (such as when they can't tell the difference between tears and rain), but can obviously infer. Duh, Amelia, that would be the point

-sigh- So even though I have little clue as to what's going on, I probably will end up reading the rest. Oh well.

-Amelia

I too, am uber fucking confused. I didn't even know the two were related, Ch and Pro that is. Caught me off guard.

But whatever, this in particular I thought, was excellently done.

oh man... now I want to go read ALL of ch.....
I'll wait till it's published, shall I?
Well, I'm gonna keep reading anyway...

I'm sooooo confused! Apparently i need to read Ch first!

Kyle and Ariel?! Omg that REALLY caught me off guard. Somehow I think that I shouldn't be reading this until I finish Ch. but of course I'll read it anyways since my favorite characters ever are in it and... they still care about each other at least from what I got. lol

This is wonderful, I like all the twists you've put in it so far. And Jon in Texas? Away from Kyle...Oh no! I hope he doesn't do it but even if he does I'm certain you'll make it a great transition, I'm always happy as to what directions you take!

Keep at it!
~Rieda

Maybe you and Ariel could come visit when you go on vacation or something.

his voice broke a little at this point and he stopped to clear his through