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XD it's funny to read that.... in a story.
Always good to read Ch ^_^ I suppose Jon might finally be realizing Kyle's worth? But is Kyle getting anything out of this?
This is starting to turn into a real book for me, I had to do what I do when I read novels and I'm worried something surprising is coming up: I had to cover up the last few paragraphs with my hands. My eyes unnaturally jump down and look at stuff, if I catch words I might ruin the surprise. But there wasn't much to ruin but a good moment
I thought you should know the affect Ch was having on me :-p
No! NOW they disturb Kyle and Jon?! You have to be kidding me. lol, I have to admit you had me going though, nice job on that.
So...they didn't kiss but now they're being pushed together, I can see that which is good...and bad on their part.
Now what are they needed for? *hates Aries*
Oh they better leave poor Jon alone, he's been through so much! and Kyle...well you know how I feel about Kyle, he's hott...but hotter when he gets his ass kicked. lol
Great Job!
~Rieda