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Chionophobia #29 /P

by Incandescence


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Mon Feb 19, 2007 4:35 am
Emerson wrote a review...



So, was he bleeding with the cuts (and when had it happened?) or were these older wounds? I assume he had gone to their bedroom, cut, and then came out? But it still left me a little lost.

I would have really liked to have seen more talking from him, more....anything. But I can feel that that isn't right, this is how this chapter is supposed to be.

All I can say is: Hurry up and f'ing write more before I get pissy with you!!! lol. See, I caught up, and now you have a cranky fan to deal with.

Jon gives it back to her and she closes her eyes to let the shadows be swallowed up into the light.
This sentence is in the present tense. Even if it is on purpose, it doesn't fit with everything else.




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Sun Feb 18, 2007 3:56 pm
Ofour says...



Whoa. I just read 1 to 29, non-stop. They flow from one to another just like a book, the character development and style are superb. I cannot wait to read the next installment.




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Fri Feb 16, 2007 7:33 am
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WOO-HOO! :D

That's all I can say. I love chionophobia stories, and am in love with the characters. I came in on #26 and had to go back to #1 . I'm all caught up now, and am thrilled with this newest addition! I love it! Have you published before? :D

How often do you post these? They're great!




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Fri Feb 16, 2007 7:26 am
Loose says...



oh my goodness....

i cant even find the right words....

just oh my goodness.......





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