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Lips and Knees? Were you feeling to shy to say anything else? Is this some reference to something because otherwise knees aren't all that attractive. (Mine aren't.)
cut off he d, right? or...change it. yeah, you get it, wrong tense crap.Well, what ever it is that you didn't change for my new found complaints, keep not changing it. I loved this, but I'm scared out of my mind with all of the "omg it could be" and feel like it's coming to its closing but I KNOW it's not. We still have zombie people, and a rape charge. Oh, and the red head kid, or who ever.
Ariel still loves Jon, I knew it, and now she might get in the way of Kyle and Jon which is a bad thing because she's supposed to be getting them together before that. And Sarah...Died?! What the hell?
I have a crazy idea that the thing behind her was the same "thing" that you wrote a prespective of...I'm probably wrong but whatever, my mind has never worked in a nomal manor. lol
I loved this one!(haha, I love all of them obviously) I just mentioned conflict and here it is, another conflict! Though it invloves an almost "manufactured" love between Jon and Kyle, I can't wait to actually read that one. lol
Great job Bradness!
Keep at it!
~Rieda