Points:
Time spent:
IP address:
Canary word: Present
Possible AI signals:
Original Text:
Are you sure you want to delete this comment? This cannot be undone.
Mark this comment as a review? Points will be awarded to the poster.
Your comment was posted, but it wasn’t long enough to count as a review. Reviews need about four complete sentences (at least 250 characters). Try writing another review that explains your thoughts in more detail — the author will appreciate it, and you’ll earn points for it.
139,536 Literary Works • 672,600 Reviews
I love this!!!
It is so cute to see kyle and Jon before they met. Jon seemed like such a cute, crazy little kid, and you kept calling him 'boy' to emphasis the youngness in him.
I liked it ^_^
I liked this as well--it seems like a foreshadow or kind of a...metaphor? For the story as a whole. I'm not sure what the word I'm looking for is...but to me it stood out.
Omg they're so cute! I can't believe Jon was talking too his backpack, it's always so nice to know what they were like when they were younger. Kyle was so...Kyle, it was just like him in just a little underdeveloped way, They were just such cute little characters. Jon with his nervous habits, Kyle with his funny remarks. I love the end also. How Kyle gave into Jon and went to eat with him. I guess they really can't resist each other. It's almost hard to believe that things got so messed up between them. And when Kyle attempts to destroy Jon...That's going to hurt so much. They were so close, it's going to be hard to see them against each other like that. Love the flashback. Great job on this!
~Rieda