Young Writers Society

Awww. Is this why Kyle is so Kyle? You'd said that the last flashback would tell why...now I actually understand. Maybe he's afraid to love someone, I mean he always seems to hurt the ones he loves and maybe it's because he's so accustomed to it. When I thought of Kyle, I never really thought about a family or brother or anything, I'd just think about Ariel, other women (Ch. Ref.) and well Jon. That's so sad:(. I wonder what was wrong with his brother though, at first I thought he was a vegetable but then he smiled and I knew that it was impossible. *cries* Poor Kyle!

~Rieda

This is really good, really moving. It confused me slightly at the start because I got the feeling that Kyle was quite old, like a teenager but then you went on to talk of how his mum picked him up and such. I think you definately picked a good part to involve the age. I really like your descriptions of the hospital, I got a really childlike feeling and I could relate, I hate hospitals. Please keep wriitng I really enjoyed reading this. Sorry I don't have anything more constructive to say
Kasie xxx

Wow. That really is heart breaking...Poor young kyle. Of course, I have so little knowledge of death, that I'm just kind of, "aww..." but I can't really feel with him. Still is sad, though.

she just wanted to make I remembered them.