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Melnikov #5 /P

by Incandescence


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Tue Aug 07, 2007 2:06 pm
Emerson says...



I'm so tempted to finish this chapter with something like: Oh Shiz!


So yes me and your one friend? We must be sharing brain waves or something. In other words: I liked this chapter.




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Sun Jul 29, 2007 8:16 am
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*sigh* The Jon/Kyle-ness is so wonderful! Though...I could have sensed flirting from Jon, he did ask Kyle if they were on a date afterwords so, that's good. And I loved Kyle's reaction, but he's still shy to Jon's affection! One time he wants to jump him and the next he's like...um, this could be a date, yeah. Whatever makes you happy. lol, But they're so cute. And I had to look up that last part, the schematic lung...wow. And the beginning did confuse me for a little while. lol, so Jon...is imagining this. I don't know, I could have sworn I read one of these parts before...it would be very odd if I dreamed this. Can't wait for the next! The puzzle already begins!

~Rieda





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