This is Nikayla here dropping in for a review on Review Day.
You could definitely call this poem effective at making the reader feel something. Or at least, this poem made me feel something. At the same time, I'm confused as to what you're attempting to get across with this poem. It seems that you're trying to portray this scene or atmosphere with a quiet girl in high school, writing alone. The last four to five lines seem to suggest that this girl that is described is asking for help or reaching out for help in her writing, yet it never gets across to her friends.
The reason as to why it's touching no one seems to be that they either never notice her pleas or that her friends never noticed them. Regardless of what those lines are supposed to mean, I think that I can say that I'm a fan of this poem, simply for the atmosphere that is portrayed or depicted here. The cologne and ink. The navy converse. The noises that attribute to the background of this girl's writing.
All of these details build on the atmosphere, and the only complaint is that there could have been more. These details that are here are a little bit scarce since the poem is so short. Overall though, it's a nice piece even if the overarching theme that you were attempting to get across is a little bit lost. I'd like to know what message you're attempting to portray with this poem, and once you do that, this poem will be an even more solid one. If you have any questions, don't be afraid to ask! I hope I helped and have a great day.
Points: 220
Reviews: 1081
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