Hey there!
This is a good poem. I liked it. My only issue with it is the rhyming... it fit well with the poem, but you used too much of it.
The content is really good... You managed to make me understand what this person is feeling, so congratulations on that!
The punctuation all seems to be okay... So, just work out your rhyming and you're all set!
Well done, I enjoyed this.
-Clarity'xo
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