Hey speakerskat! It's Queenie here to review your poem. I really like your poem because I think that it was written in a beautiful style. Now for the critiques. I like the rhyme scheme in the beginning because it helped with the flow, but then I think that the last line should rhyme with clouds instead of lies so it fits the rhyme scheme. Also, I think that this poem was a little confusing, so perhaps consider elaborating more, making your poem a little bit longer. That being said, I still think that it was a very enjoyable poem, and I look forward to reading your future works.
Points: 47
Reviews: 45
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