Loving you is like
seeing a new color.
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Like wind rustling
Sakura blossoms,
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You're splashes of beauty
upon my blind existence,
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Warmth encasing me
beautiful hopefulness.
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Delicate sunlight
tinted a soft pink,
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Thousands of petals
dancing over the breeze,
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This Sakura rain
filling my heart.
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Yet one sweet dancer
tiptoed across my lips,
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One elegant petal,
Changed my life.
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In a world of darkness,
You alone were my light.
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And as an otaku I could not leave this behind and not say anything about this work.
I loke Sakura trees so this caught my eye. I could not bear it, sorry. XD
I love the way how this poetry is so sweet and romantic. Making me imagine road filled with big trees and the flowers full of colour that catches the eye of their viewer. On some places you had
capitalization after comma but it was totally the opposite in other parts of this poetry. I think you need to choose between these both styles. You can write in both of them but not at once in one single work.
Warmth encasing me
beautiful hopefulness.
This was the spanza I wanted to ask about. Also, about the spanza after this one but it was not as questanable as in this one. So the warmth encases you.. like a beautiful hopefulness or something like that? Or you just say it connected with the warmth that is encasing you. Maybe I need basic explaination. Kind of sleepy here so I may talk like a drunk man.
Good job and keep on writing.
Hey!
I really liked this poem. It was elegant and beautiful. It reminded me of anime and of Japan which makes me excited. The wording and imagery was really poetic and beautiful. Overall I thought this poem was wonderful but it was also rather long, that doesn't bother me that much but I sort of wish it was shorter.
Anyway I hope my review was helpful,
Alice ♥
Hello, Gymnast2801 here!
This was a very touching poem and I really liked it. Umm...I don't think I really have anything negative to say about this poem. It's very well written and deep. I especially loved the ending-wonderful work selection there. Overall, great job and I hope that you keep writing poems!
Hi, speakerskat! This was a very beautiful poem. I love the visual it gave me and your flow from line to line was magnificent! Your choice of words made me take this poem to heart and think about someone who is like this for me! This makes me think of very deep emotions that people rarely show. Overall wonderful job and keep up the good work. I hope to read more of your work in the future!
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