This is the story of Picky Peak-a-Boo
She won't eat for me nor you.
She won't eat anything brown,gray,white, or blue
even if you tell her to.
She won't eat fast nor slow
even if you promise her a play in the snow.
She won't eat no no no.
She won't even eat your homemade cookie dough.
She won't eat for me nor you even if you tell her to.
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Hi speakerskat!
This is Eros here!!
This poem " The story of Peaky Pick-A- Boo" is a cute, little, sweet poem.It has many rhyming words in it like : boo-you; slow-snow.
This poem describes about a little girl (or it may be a toy) who/ which eats nothing. Even if you make something at home for her she would not eat it.If you say that if you eat this i will play with you in the snow even then her reply is a big NO. This poem describes of the problem that Picky Peak-a-boo doent eat anything.
This poem is overall a good poem. But I think you can make it little longer.You can add up a litle more spicy matter like what happens to her when she doesnt eat anything.She falls ill....The doctor gives her injection...she is afraid and starts eating everything.and you can end up the poem with a posiive note that she becomes halthy and every one starts liking her.
Anyways...The poem was really very sweet and nice. I guess this poem is written a long ago and I can say that you have improved a lot and you will keep improving yourself till you become a Perfect Young Writer.
Amazing, especially for the younger readers! A great poem too!!!! I love the rhyming though I write poems, I'm terrible w/ a capital T when trying to rhyme. Please look for my work.
Awh, cute! It sounds just like my cousins! Great job!
"She won't even eat your homemade cookie dough" lol, she's insane! i love cookie dough! (my cooking of the cookie dough however..... yuck, I wouldn't blame her.)
This is an innocent poem but at the same time it has a deeper meaning, espeacilly fo rthe people who really refuse to eat anything at all. Cool poem, awesome job, keep writing! I'll be reading more of your stuff!
Peace
~*~fairygirl~*~