I.
Time is relentless,
Racing towards us with our fate,
Stealing all we love.
II.
Time is a reaper,
Hiding souls under its cloak,
Nothing escapes death.
III.
Time is a savior,
Healing all our suffering,
Till it's forgotten.
IV.
Time is the distance,
Between the broken-hearted,
And their truest love.
V.
Time solves all problems,
Mends all that has been shattered,
Yet, causes such grief.
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Really, really good job! Although you've not kept the syllable count right in ALL the lines, it can't be perfect, right? And they are really good. I mean it. So true, and so creative, and you've used WOW expressions.
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I especially like the fourth and the fifth one. The fifth........sooo true and amazing!
Keep it up! (I commented before, I know, but I wanted to give you a proper review
Mysticalxx
I didn't notice any syllables wrong ...
Hey! ChocolateCello here!
So, I'm not really sure if this can be called a review but...
You did an amazing job with this. I, personally, couldn't not write a proper haiku if my life depended on it. I'm horrible with syllables and I always struggle to put meaning into such little writing. You, on the other hand, seem excel at this. Your syllables are all counted correctly and each set of three lines conveys great meaning, tying together into a beautiful set of haiku about time. Everything was written very poetically and it all flowed smoothly. I don't usually find joy in reading haikus, most people focus more on the set up than the content, but I couldn't help but read this over and over again, enjoying every word. If you post any more haiku, let me know!
Keep writing!
-ChocolateCello
I like them!
Fun fact: the plural of haiku is, in fact, haiku!
I'll review this later
Hi!
I have never really heard of a haiku (what is a haiku, actually?). But they are really, really good. It tells about time and what it does. I agree with you about everything here. I don't have much to say. Good job and keep writing!!!!! (write more haikus)
@fantasydragon01.
A haiku , as explained by Soka of the water tribe , is a Japanese poems consisting of three lines where the syllables are 5 7 5 .
Oh, thank you. I find haikus pretty interesting.