Hey there, Kat,
I'm not sure about this-- do you mean to say hallow, as in sacred/highly valued, or hollow, as in empty, high and dry? Nevertheless, I like this poem. I usually am the first to jump on people about how repetition is an awful literary device when not done properly, but here, you've managed to use it perfectly and incorporate internal rhyme that you carried through to the end.
The first three stanza are your strongest, without a doubt. The last one feels like an afterthought, an addition, not as thought-out as the prior ones. It works, no doubt, but it feels like we're missing some thing here because the narrator goes from examining her hurts and wounds to childish simplicity-- so mean!
Overall, I thank you for a pleasant read. Great use of structure here and two thumbs up.
Happy review day,
June
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