This may be not really helpful, I am sorry for that.
But I can not pass a great work.
Such an annoying jerk I am, but what to do.
I know that the style in which you write is our own choice and we can change that, but anyways, this work has a very good grammar and punctuation. I think the only problem is the capitalization. I do not know, if someone had already said it, because I did not scroll down to look the reviews of the others. I will double read this and see if there is something that can be called a mistake, with the capitalization left aside, of course.
You have the innocence of a child,
your crimes are no big deal,
one straight look into your eyes,
and that person's heart steal.
(For the last line, I understand what you mean, I think.
I do not want to break down the rhyme, so I will not change it.
'that person's heart is stolen' or something like that?)
You have an unrealistic sense of optimism,
yet you hate everything I do,
because I am the only one,
who can see staright through to you.
You weave a little web,
complex and intertwined,
with nothing more than innocence,
inside your perfect mind.
Everyone thinks you wrong,
no one would ever guess,
what you really say and really do,
is sweeter than the rest.
I just adore this rhyme!
I may sound weird, but this is the truth.
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