Gracefully Forever

This is a beautiful poem and shows me how graceful you felt writing this poem. It really shows how two people dance romantically together without a care in the world. It is a really good poem showing a wonderful relationship. This work is more happy then some of your other work ive read but it is good all the same. Keep on writing!

Hi, if I am GreenTulip, but Tulip is the name. I am here to offer you a review.

1. Your poem isn't terrible, but it can be better. It's good in the format it is in.
2. How would I fix it? I would recommend making stanzas. I will give you an example:

-Example A= Your's right now-
Your hands move,

Delicatley, slowly,

Along my sides,

Your lips on mine,

Smooth,light,

I loose myself,

In your embrace,

-Example B= How I would fix it.-
Your hands move,
Delicately, slowly,
Along my sides.

Your lips on mine,
Smooth, and light.

I loose myself,
In your embrace.

Hey, it's me, Ella, here to review your wonderful poem!

Your hands move,

Delicat(e)ly, slowly,

Along my sides,

Your lips on mine,

Smooth,(insert space here)light,

I lo(remove an o)se myself,

In your embrace,

No longer scared,

Warm,(insert space here)safe,

Finally free,

I look in your eyes,

And all I see,

Is love and joy,

Complete,(insert space here)happy,

I wrap my hands

Across your sho(u)lders,

And you wrap yours,

Around my waist,

And we dance,

Gracefully forever.