Hi! Ok so I really liked this piece. I enjoyed how your style was like what you were describing for your writing. Like when you said
"as long as one poem
one line
one
word"
I liked how you used this stylistic approach to better your work and make it stand out more. I also noticed this with the lines
"the clock snails on
seconds blurrinto into minutes
minutes blurrinto hours
hours blurrinto a lifetime"
I think that your piece is very good with the stylistic elements. And it makes it interesting to read. I'm not bored by it; it captures the reader.
Overall, I think the language and punctuation you used was simple but elegant. I hope you continue to write poems like this! Can't wait to read more of your work!
-E
Points: 61
Reviews: 49
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