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I'm a Poet

by speakerskat


I’m a poet,
And I know it,
And I’m not afraid to show it.
 
I talk about persuasion,
Like mathematicians and equation,
No need for a vocation,
When I’ve got my punctuation.
 
I'm writing a rhyme,
While you’re wasting time,
In a Wal-Mart line.
 
Don’t you get tired?
Of not being admired,
I’m writing a satire,
While you’re getting fired.
 
When you’re shoveling snow,
I’ll be on a show,
Talking about my poetic flow.
 
So go and boast,
“I can make toast”,
To my show’s host,
Except we poets have the most.
 
That’s why I’m a poet,
And now you know it,
And this is how I show it!


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Sun May 31, 2015 1:54 am
Konijn says...



Oh my goodness! This is just about the most interesting poem I've ever read! Its so true, and yet shown in such a funny way that I can't help but laugh. I really love the rhyme scheme and how it all flows together. Its pure genius. Keep writing! :)




speakerskat says...


I'm so embarrassed XD my best poems aren't even on this site because I am sending them to London, I wrote this when I was 10 >.<



Konijn says...


I think its pretty awesome, especially for you to still have the poems you wrote when you were younger. I love some of the things i wrote when i was young.. I actually have a few on this site as well. Anyways, this piece is original and just overall awesome. :D



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Sun May 31, 2015 1:45 am
Eros wrote a review...



Hi Speakerskat!!

This is Eros here!

I loved and enjoyed reading your poem " I am A Poet ". I appriciate your straightforwardness.You say that:~
"I’m a poet,
And I know it,
And I’m not afraid to show it."
It shows that if you are a poet what is the need of hiding it? You are a poet indeed.You have composed a beautiful poem.
This has got many rhyming words.
You have added a grace and completed the meaning of your poem by mentioning the reason as to why you are a poet.
There is no flaw as far as I can see.

I loved your pem.Keep writing for we want to read more such stuff.




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Sun Jun 30, 2013 4:10 pm
Hannah wrote a review...



Haha, this was great. I kept thinking to myself I wouldn't like your rhymes and I'd get tired of them, especially since they started with the most annoying and over-said couplet in the entire poetic world, but I actually really dug them! I loved how it referenced pop culture and lives while still staying sassy.

You juust... you did kind of lose it at the end, which is completely understandable. You start with a perfect thing, keep hitting it strong, but eventually you might run out of steam. Here's the problem:

Except we poets have the most.

That’s why I’m a poet,
And now you know it,
And this is how I show it!


First of all, the line about the toast and hosting is kind of lame, but it works with our practical skills, so I let it slide. But that last line makes know sense. Except? That doesn't work with the structure of the sentence. I got shaken up and then I got hit with the rhyme I hate again, so that made me really dislike the ending. I don't think you need to bookend this poem. I think you need to move to a different place, because otherwise it's just a list of things you can do instead of a realization of new information, which I'd rather see.

Hopefully this was understandable and helpful.
PM me if you have questions or comments about my review, please.
Good luck and always keep writing!




speakerskat says...


Yes thanks for the review, this was really more of a jokey rap and certainly not my best poem. I'm always up for some constructive critisisim though ;)



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Sun May 26, 2013 5:55 am
LosPresidentes wrote a review...



Alright! I didn't know to expect that! Good job!
XD You are indeed 'A poet'
a very interest way to go about it.

I’m a poet,
And I know it,
And I’m not afraid to show it.

A very odd, effective statement. IT works well. =3

I talk about persuasion,
Like mathematicians and equation,
No need for a vocation,
When I’ve got my punctuation.

A lot of imagery, and a very clear way to project it. =3 Nice nice.

I'm writing a rhyme,
While you’re wasting time,
In a Wal-Mart line.

I do not like this stanza, not one bit.
To each their own?

Don’t you get tired?
Of not being admired,
I’m writing a satire,
While you’re getting fired.

Again, the nice sensible poem went out the window -.-;

When you’re shoveling snow,
I’ll be on a show,
Talking about my poetic flow.

It went from poetry to rap, but still, now we're getting back there, a nice twist.

So go and boast,
“I can make toast”,
To my show’s host,
Except we poets have the most.

What do we have?

That’s why I’m a poet,
And now you know it,
And this is how I show it!

It ended a little bit weird. =3

IT started out nice, but it needs some work. Even though it's satire, it should be clear. Not saying that this is clear.




speakerskat says...


It's actually a rap... it was just for some fun when I was bored....It's not a satire intentionally XD I like the second stanza and agree the wal mart line and most stuff afterwards is pretty bad....how is it for a rap though XD ?



Wonder says...


For a rap?? I just rapped this, and I'm grinning as I write. Great for a rap - now go rap it and post it on YouTube. xD



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Sun May 26, 2013 12:32 am
Jonathan wrote a review...



Hellllo I (Who loves poetry and is one of my specialties) Would love to do a small review for you welll here goees sorry if I did anything wrong in this here but please point out any problems if you seee any anyway this is short and for review day.

I hope it helped.

I’m a poet,
And I know it,
And I’m not afraid to show it.
This is more like a sing song sort of thing I have herd a song that is much like this but it is about something else.

Speaking of punctuation I think you have to much of it in this piece of poetry.

YOU are doing something that I do not think is a good idea YOU are personalizing it saying YOU YOU bla bla bla it is not a good way to do it, but you can do it if you like it is just not the best of ways.


I do not think why would you boast to make toast? XD

Okay buddy this is a very good piece rimes and so on was goooood.

Good job I think there were some probs but overall this was great.

Keep writing and good luck.

Sorry about my problems in the review.

I hope it helped.

~Jon~ :pirate3:





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