I love this, it's different, new and original. I love how you allowed your readers to see the accent given by the main character in the poem. Just the lines... wow, I really did enjoy them. My favorite is probably where you said:
"She left me to raise her
three kids dat were devils
with demonic eyes
and hair all disheveled
consuming my rice
along my gravel."
This was so perfect, almost professional. Very creative and wonderful. Oh lord, I have nothing bad to say about this. Very well done, I mean that.
Yours,
Cate
Points: 627
Reviews: 79
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