Ojos azules y tiernos de mujer,
de mirada suave como el rocio.
Cuanto deseo bendecirlos
con un beso en cada cual
antes que duermas, para
que asi sueñes conmigo
y conmigo nada mas.
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Ojos azules y tiernos de mujer,
tan suaves como el rocio
no bruscos como los mios.
Damelos, que los deseo besar.
In the Spanish culture the strong desire to lightly kiss a woman’s beautiful eyes is very common.
DESEO BESAR SUAVEMENTE TUS OJOS
https://www.poemas-del-alma.com/blog/mo ... oema-87860
Dulces Sueños Besan Tus Ojos
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=EkqA9eOijU0
Dejame besar tus ojos - Armando Palomas
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8d_PkXtfXe4
Hey, AJ here!
Sooo I speak very, very, VERY limited Spanish, so I had to Google translate this poem... But I think it's lovely! Just a few comments...
One question: At least according to the translation, the speaker wants to kiss the woman's eyes. Is that correct? Seems odd. If that is the right translation, I would suggest him doing something other than kissing her eyes. Perhaps gazing into them or kissing her cheek.
"...para/ que asi sueñes conmigo / y conmigo nada mas." Wow, I liked this line... Very beautifully written.
I feel like this poem is missing something though... I don't really see the woman that well, only her eyes. Perhaps consider adding a little to the poem. Overall, though, I think this was well done. Good job!
Keep on writing, and Happy Review Day!
-AJ
I'm not sure if I should have written this in Spanish. Oh well English was the language I started typing in so yeah. Great job describing her physical beauty, but I feel like her personality should be showcased as well. Unless it’s him looking from afar and he is admiring her beauty. I’m not sure which one was intended. =_= Anyways I thought it was a great poem and the first time I saw a poem in this website in Spanish! (I don’t see a lot of fellow Hispanics on this website). Keep writing! 
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