"Whatever he decrees becomes fulfilled." -- Hey Rad, what if after or below this line you adjoin a little quip (He introduces bewildering directions & impractical odds to Cause spectacle & Marveling over His name!)
My father owns the universe entire.
Attack him and your own existence risk.
He is a raging, all-consuming fire.
No power can survive his blazing fist.
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His reaching hand can never be restrained.
Once he extends it, it will do his will.
His utterance unleashed diluvial rains.
Whatever he decrees becomes fulfilled.
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His girth is broader than ten billion suns.
His height surpasses distant galaxies.
Before the battle starts, it has been won.
Opposing him is sheer futility.
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My father owns the universe entire.
Be wise you foolish demons!
Quick!
Retire!
"Whatever he decrees becomes fulfilled." -- Hey Rad, what if after or below this line you adjoin a little quip (He introduces bewildering directions & impractical odds to Cause spectacle & Marveling over His name!)
Hello, @Radrook! I am excited to review yet another spiritual poem from a friend who I know as the "Writer of Poems Great and Many". I honestly anticipating this review a lot while reading your poem because, although it is short, it delivers a powerful message that could change the heart of the reader with a snap and alter the course of history. Okay, maybe it's not that good, but we'll see. Let's begin the review.
Before I read that you were the author, I was intrigued by what this poem could be about. Whose father could own the whole universe? My confusion was lifted when I saw your name as the author, because I realized that you were referring to your Heavenly Father, not your biological father. Now let's talk about the writing itself.
I like how the stanzas mirror my own style- a uniform 4-line stanza with an "A B A B" rhyme scheme. It makes your poem feel orderly without restricting the reader's imagination. Though my poems are usually "A B C B", I still feel like this style mimics my own in many ways.
Now let's talk about grammar and spelling. The grammar was practically perfect and I felt no disturbances in the Spelling today. Trust me, it annoys me when people misspell That's all I have time to write today. Have fun during this Review Day, and make sure to help the Red Pandas win!
~ZeldaIsShiek
Where all the inspiration comes from is Exciting!! Are these difficult to write, or do they just come together rather fast? This is the look we don't usually get, but very much NEED to understand - He is All-Powerful and what he purposes cannot be frustrated one bit
Hey there! You already know who I am from those very helpful letters above my name, and I believe we've already been introduced, so I'll skip that part and jump right into this.
I'd like to start by saying that I really love these Biblical poems. As a fellow Christian, I found this really edifying, and it's always nice to see a believer reaching out in faith and confidence and using the talents that God has given them to spread their beliefs, because a strong belief is contagious, and it just really brightens my day, so keep it up 
In poetry, obviously there's quite a bit of leeway to play with the order of words, but in this case, I feel that while the meaning is obvious, it feels unnatural, and the more I read it, the more it seemed to be more confusing than necessary.His utterance reality sustains.
Again, your choice as the poet, but it seems like it would be more natural to add a comma here so there's a natural pause there (between "starts" and "it").Before the battle starts it has been won.
Hello, Hello! Desdemona of Writing Wookies here for a review!
I am always a bit unsure about religious poetry because I've never really been a very religious person, I am in fact a theist at the moment, but this particular piece calls out to me for reasons I cannot quite fathom. Well done.
This piece flows really very smoothly. No syllable runs odd, no line is too unrelated to the stanza it is in, all in all this piece is excellent work, dedicated to the might and power of the one creator who rules us all. This piece is particularly successful in making me actually feel the presence of something greater than me looking down at me, watching me. I've missed feeling that way. Are you inspired from the Bible quotes you give? Or does your poetry stem from a particular chapter of the Bible? Either way it's absolutely amazing and incredible.
Your pieces are absolutely beautiful and I can already see that you have a great writing future ahead of you! Keep on!
Keep writing, and smile!
Desdemona
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