oh my god!! this was a great poem,exactly how one feels when they are betrayed. There was a power in each and every word.The rhyme-scheme was awesome. When the lines are read, I felt the pain. The vibe of the poem was empathetic.
I was totally awed by these lines:
"Somewhere inside i feel a bitter pain.
Somewhere inside she bludgeons me again
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I’m weeping, and the people are all puzzled,
imagine that some rum or wine I’ve guzzled,
imagine that I’m on some crazy drugs,
or dreaming being beaten by some thugs."
Oh, man, wait, I think I have to paste the whole poem.
I like all the lines, and the consistency?! Great.
I totally loved this poem.Great talent you have.
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