While attempting to land on Kazoom
I engaged retrorockets too soon
and landed alone
in fields of pure stone
at Approx a full quarter to noon.
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Scattered rocks were all perfectly round.
There were seismic-type grooves on the ground
and some quaint little fellows
with faces bright yellow
while the rest of their bodies were brown.
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With crimson, coarse hair to their shoulders,
they followed from boulder to boulder.
Since I had no blaster
I started walk faster.
Felt my blood flowing colder and colder.
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The little chaps stalked me you see,
in groups of a four and of three.
So I broke into run
under alien sun
and I heard them all chuckling with glee!
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In the distance my ship was awaiting.
My heart in my chest palpitating
So I hit second gear
and became rocketeer
and was splattered against the ships grating.
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So I hit second-gear and all of them cheered
as i splattered against the ship's grating.
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Addendum
The stanzas are written in what is called Limerics
the beat pattern is
3
3
2
2
3
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Limerick_(poetry)
The word "Grating" rhymes with "palpitating".
The word "see"maintains the conversational style I intended.
I originally misspelled "coarse" as "course".
Envoy
https://www.youngwriters.co.uk/terms-envoy
Repetition
http://www.angelfire.com/ct2/evenski/poetry/repeti...
Please note that retrorockets are not spaceships. They are part of a spaceship.https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Retrorocket
The expression blood running cold is and idiomatic expression. Idiomatic expressions aren’t meant to be taken literally. If they were, they would be nonsensical.
https://www.usingenglish.com/reference/idioms/
make (one's) blood run cold
To cause one to feel frightened or unnerved. The screams coming from the old, dark house made my blood run cold. That gruesome scene in the new horror movie made our blood run cold.
Farlex Dictionary of Idioms. © 2015 Farlex, Inc, all rights reserved.
make your blood run cold or make your blood freeze
If something makes your blood run cold or makes your blood freeze, it frightens or shocks you very much. The rage in his eyes made her blood run cold. It makes my blood run cold to think what this poor, helpless child must have gone through. Note: You can also simply say that your blood runs cold or your blood freezes. Then his blood froze. For there in the crowd was the one face he didn't want to see.
https://idioms.thefreedictionary.com/make+your+blo...
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