Hey Radrook, I hope you don't mind if I leave you another review after so many today. I saw that your newest addition to your fine collection of poetry and writings involved a Native American Woman, so I was intrigued and decided to give it a read.
Your poem tells a story that takes place when (presumably) Europeans began taking over the Americas, and in the process, wiping out the Native Americans. Your poem is centered around a Native American woman who is hiding as violence is going rampant. She prays for a time when violence will be no more and the peaceful nature will return to it's ways before the violence.
My Opinion:
Your poem touched my heart deeply. When I first learned the truth behind the history of our country, I was left with a deeply rooted guilt. I knew that I, as a person today, could not have done anything. So my guilt has always been ill-fitted. But it never stopped me from feeling guilty and angry at those who would commit such atrocities, and anyone in general who do such things.
So, whether your intention or not, this poetic story made me empathetic for the woman and those who suffered in this time at the hands of greed and selfishness and evil.
My only suggestion is for the first line, should it have a comma? Or some form of punctuation? Every other line had some except the first.
I really enjoyed this read. It was not only well-written with your choice in vocabulary, but the story was also very touching... I too dream of a day when all violence ceases to exist.
I look forward to reading more of your work soon!
Keep Writing,
-Katja
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