When ya smufffe don’t gruffle, just shuffle da grool .
When ya shingle, don’t bingle, just dinngle the spool
When ya spangle don’t bangle, just shangle the brocks.
When ya briggle don’t figgle, just dribble da socks.
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When ya need to heave heaven, heave ho with a grunt.
When ya need to grive gravel, don’t fraggle the front.
When ya hear the hell holler hellaciously loud
Just believe all believers and priddle the proud.
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When sepulcres all seeth with seduction seduced
When the toothless all tithe and they teef become tooth
When the planets palaver pellucidly clear
and the foam frickles not on the fringe of your pier.
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Then tell my Teresa that you still remain sane
and never cry “Crud!” when the crabs crawl your brain.
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Here is the definition of Sepulchre
https://www.thefreedictionary.com/sepulchres
I had misspelled it sepulclres.
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Hey Radrook, time for me to take a spot in the light once more.
Time to Review.
I love the rhyming scheme that you have going in the first stanza. The online Thesaurus had no clue what ' sepulclres' meant. Well I have a clear picture of something in my head, not sure what it is. I believe that you did really well with this poem.
I hope that this made some sense, anyways... Keep up with the writing, and have a great day.
Thanks for the review.
I did misspell the word you are referring to. But when I enter it in Google search it provides the definition using the right spelling. Also, the spell checker automatically provides the intended spelling.
https://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/sepulchre
Hey, OniiChan here!
I read this to a friend and they looked at me weird.
Great poem! I have separate opinions on each stanza.
1.
This made no sense, but I guess it wasn’t supposed to. Great rhymes.
2
I like this one. It makes no sense and sense at the same time in a way I can’t explain.
3
This is my favorite. It has a feel of stanza 2, but is just written much well. I feel like you could’ve done something better that seduced and tooth.
4
This one was ok. It just didn’t fit in as well as the other three.
Overall, great poem! Keep up the awesome work!
Keep on writing!
Thanks for the review. Will take your feedback into serious consideration to see if I can improve the lines you mention. Thanks for the help.