Here It Is Again

Hey there evilzombiekitten here to review.

The emotion in this is very good and i enjoyed it a lot, a piece of work i would put on my wall and be proud of, it is beautiful and well thought out and this is what makes me enjoy it.

The flow of the poem was very good, however it could be improved with a tiny bit of tweaking just so it isn't all sudden.

I liked the phrase you chose to repeat "here it is again" It is effective, and showing the person she has felt these feelings before.

The tense is being jumped around a lot, which could be fixed by just changing some of the verbs.

As KaspynPaxian said, this is a powerful poem.

I like how there is so much more than just one emotion that you focus on. It truly sounds like a day in the life of everybody, with kind of flippy-floppy feelings and struggles (does that make any sense?).

To me, it seems that there is a sort of optimistic tone to it that makes the whole thing sound very hopeful.

Overall, I like it very much, and can't find anything to correct (this isn't turning out to be very constructive, is it?).

Hey there auother2b here and ready to review. (mostly because I detest french homework)

What I liked:

1. The flow. It wasn't bad, but not amazing. It was...nice. A nice flow... which is good.

2. The idea. I have this feeling or have these feelings all the time. (they're more or less one feeling though) I think you did a good job at getting what you want to say across.

3. "I would dislike looking like a fool" I don't know what it is but I loved this line. Its original to me.

4. The repeatition. I think you chose wisely on what to repeat. Repeating for the sake of repeating gets really annoying really fast, but you didn't do that here.

What I didn't like:

1. The tense. First rule of any writing, stay in one tense, past, present, or future. DO NOT JUMP AROUND, it will only confuse you reader. An example of the switching of tense in your piece is

"Here it is again.
For a moment, I was happy"

Great lines except is and was are the same verb, but in diffrent tenses. I get you were trying to say you were happy, but the fact its a reacurring thing means you can say, for a momment I am happy, but it goes away.

2. The lack of emotion. I could read this over and over again, and while I love the idea, I don't feel the spark and strength I know this piece could have. Really try and convey your thoughts and desires, find your purpose for writing this and put it in there, or if you don't want to add more then apply it to your next piece. You want to evoke strong emotions, which I don't seem to have here.

Overall:
Great start. Work on tense and emotion, but don't change too much. Loved it!

this is not bad its kinda like how i feel jsut know your not alone

This poem has a powerful, sad tone behind it.
The thing i liked the most about it was the last stanza:

"All I can do is
put on a weary smile.
Then, suddenly, my feelings confuse me.
And now, there it goes."

I liked the way that it was easy to relate with and felt very open.

There's a few grammar mistakes, for example, in the first stanza you said

"I would dislike looking like an fool,"

when it should be "a fool"

other than that, I thought it was a solid poem. with time the flow of your poetry will work even better and the quality will improve.

keep it up

-kaspyn