You claim you were just having fun?
So killing people is fun?
So ruining lifes is fun?
So taking away lifes,
ones that are so special,
is FUN?
What kind of society
are we forming?
One where people are afraid.
One where no school is safe.
One where no movie theater is safe.
One where not even a simple marathon is safe.
Will it ever get better?
Will a happy place ever exist?
Because behind all this happiness,
there is hidden badness.
Can I ever feel safe?
Can anybody ever feel safe?
Why is this world so confusing?!?!??
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Whoa! It's so true and realistic, I love this sorta work. Thanks for writing this first of all ^^
My question, Is the "You" is society or some individual?
So many questions you asked and all those are somehow all of our question. but, who to answer? Government? God? i think we!
if our society is bad, it's because of us, if we change ourselves in good way, our society will change drastically in a good way as well. it's us who have got to change. even today, there's racism, there's hate for other religion, there's teasing for weak or ignorance. IT'S WE WHO HAVE GOTTA CHANGE, I believe.
It's a very good work. my second review (or rather say, FAT COMMENT) on you work. after reading one, i'm feeling curious about the other one.
You're a good write! <_> yes!
Okay! stay fine and happy and laugh hard! ^_^
3rd review for you!
Mmkay, so I'll get right to the review. Honestly? I didn't like this as much as some of your works. I understand what point you are trying to get crossed, but to be honest, it's a little choppy in my opinion. Also the extra question marks and exclamation points are kind of strange.
Love you Cheese, and never stop writing!
~Sarai
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This is amazing it's so true doe. Society is pretty crazy and you sure explained it good in this. This world is very confusing, and you're amazing at writing. Keep your head up high and never give up. <3 Love you like a sister!
<3 Love you like a sister
Imma review this!
K, so Hi! You know me. I decided I wanted to read more of your works and found this and decided I love it.
On to the review!
Alright, first I hate how everyone can write poetry but me:( haha. This poem was beautiful. It captures the realness of life today on this Earth.
It really makes you wonder if any of this madness is ever going to be put to an end.
Good job!
-Frayer
Wow, so perfect! It has no flaws! I love the way you executed this! Kudos my friend! I see you views about society. I agree with some, not all, and know where you're coming from. Anyway, excellent work with the poem, and I hope you view of society are seen by others!
This poem is excellent!
No errors or anything like that, and you used an amazing topic to write about.
I actually almost cried, because all those questions you asked, just can't be answered.
Anyways, keep up the amazing work!
I want to see more writing from you in the future.
~NoOne
Right on girl!!!!!!!
This is so true!!!!!!! I am sorry about all the exclamation marks!!!! I just agree with you so much!