I really thought that amount of detail presented within this poem was something that I haven't seen before as poems tend to be rather short and lacking in such detail. I also liked your use of rhetorical questions such as:
I am so ashamed in myself anymore.
Why cant I stop it?
Questions are a really good way in drawing in a readers.
I also liked your ending and felt that it was the most power lines of your piece.
My knife, my blades,
they are my only friends.
They think I should die.
I don't know anymore.
The insane feeling is really brought out within these last lines. All in all a great job and at times I was even a little scared. Great job, keep it up!
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