Depressions steals the day.
Takes the fun away... again.
This happens all the time.
Depression will be the death of me.
I tried to get help.
Screaming a silent plea.
Wanting an escape.
Depression's killing me.
Words choke me to shock.
The vicious, silent killers.
I wanted help, not an apology.
Depression's the death of me.
No point to live anymore.
Help isn't on it's way.
If only I could escape it,
that doubt and insecurity.
Depression was my death.
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Hello!
This is amazing, I am reading this during class, and I honestly started tearing up. I know the feeling of depression all too well. The way your words are perfect, the way you describe exactly how you are feeling of not being a able to breathe. Anyways, i think you should try separating your stanzas.
Remember someone is always here for you love. No matter what. Things may not seem like they will work out or get better but, we are only given things we are known to be able handle. Always remember that.
My stanzas aren't separating like I would like them to xD And thnks for the review!
Wow depressing. But I'm one to talk so... Good poem sounds morbid. But silent pleas aren't often heard and there are very few who notice them and by the time it's noticed it's too late so pleaing silently is a vain attempt. I know form experience. Because of this I might publish my first serious poem. It's called Depression is me... I wrote when I was eleven.
Please do. I would love to read a serious poem by you.
Hey, HT here to review.
I really like this. It's written very well. The punctuation, spelling, and grammar are very good, and unfortunately I can relate very closely to the plot, so I know how this can feel. Except for the part about it being the narrators death.
I like how you attempted to separate the verses/lines/stanzas with indentations, but I personally think that you should separate them from one another entirely, like so:
If you don't want to do this however, that's fine.
If you tried to do this and it didn't work, press shift before you press enter. That genuinely works sometimes.
Peace,
HT
Thanks, I've.been having trouble separating my stanzas
I like this poem. I like how you made it like... depression was the death of the speaker, but not directly. This is how I feel sometimes when I am feeling depressed, so I think you captured that feeling pretty well.
I like how it is almost like a timeline. The speaker talks about depression interfering with their daily activities and starts to fall victim to it. This was a good poem.