Artistic talent
involves putting together
two ailments that are
complete opposites
and making them work
(This is the greatest poem I've ever written, what're you doing with your lives?!
Some things brought to us by artistic talent:
Broadway based on Books
The Microsoft Corp.
That is all.)
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Aw... lol. Well, seeing as I liked the second part better because of more vivid imagery and a personal touch, put that more into it?
There is no second stanza... this is the whole poem.... (O_O)
Hmm...wow, that made me think. Good stuff. Good tone, but I agree with Snoink that you may want to rethink how the 1st stanza is written.
I think you could expand. The second stanza was witty but it didn't have huge impact.
Ah well, I liked.
The first stanza seems like you're just separating the sentence... not too exciting. I like the second part though.