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don't become invisible

by Elizabeth


I'm in a sudden... parinoid skitzofranic mode... so... yeah... : these are what tears cause, nothing good ever comes out of them: -Me


It’s the looming scent of hand-lotion
That stimulates me for today.
But by tomorrow it’ll be gone again
Until I get to hug you

You owe me an all-day shopping spree
Because you prodded me in the chest until I agreed
To get my “bushy” eyebrows waxed.
I just hope it doesn’t hurt as much as your friend claimed

It was when I was at the hospital, half aware to life
I cried for you like when I was lost. And I was lost.
And you took the time to stay four nights with me in a row
For once not caring how much the gas prices were

I can never beat myself up enough for not saying enough
Now I fear you are slipping farther away
Leaving me alone to take care of your unfinished business
But if I am to be knee-high in your legacy I will not continue it
You have to do it
I would sooner die before you then watch you fade away


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Mon Dec 05, 2005 7:17 pm
Elizabeth says...



Thank you man...
I think I wrote this about my mom...




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Mon Dec 05, 2005 7:05 pm
TheBoyWhoFloed says...



its interesting, lol. nice work.




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Mon Dec 05, 2005 6:54 pm
Elizabeth says...



Any... helpful input other than the fact I can't spul wurth my lyfe?
Hee hee....




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Mon Dec 05, 2005 5:17 pm
Snoink says...



Not invisable... invisible.




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Sun Dec 04, 2005 10:15 pm
Muse says...



Well I liked it, nice and simple..
Yup..not much else i can really say about it except that its good! I feel rather drained tonight..




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Fri Dec 02, 2005 7:23 pm
Elizabeth says...



Done, and done. (It has been done but... yeah)
Thank you.




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Thu Dec 01, 2005 9:48 pm
Amice says...



hmm...
not bad...

The second stanza seems to be out of place here...
* spell out the word four

-Amice-





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