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Peck Peck Peck *Sizzle*

by Elizabeth


A whole compilement random thoughts that pop into my head. Hopefully ones that are good :P

An Explosive Yard

Peck peck peck *BANG*
Stupid chicken
It walked into my backyard
Dig dig dig *SIZZLE*
The sun came out
Detonated another land mine
And then my dog fried for it
Swim swim swim *TIDAL WAVE*
The lemonade in the glass dripped out
Of the cracks caused by another boom
And my little brother flew to Chicago (...)
"Daughter rake the lawn" my daddy says
"... NUUUUUUUUUUUH UHHHH" I reply
If I go out on a Tuesday and Miss Harris is watering her lawn
Then the land mines to the west will blow
But if I rake on a rainy Sunday in January
Then the land mines will be silent...
I live atop an area which I didn't even know
In a strange city after World War two
I guess they ran out of money
Or maybe they burned their cash
But they forgot to clear the area of land mines
No pool parties for me

(I am so sorry I even wrote this, I am just feeling overly silly and alone... so, kill this if you want to. Maybe this belongs in ranomness... I belong there)


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Tue Jun 28, 2005 1:37 am
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good, man. Don't ever feel bad for posting anything. Hell, don't feel bad for anything that you can't change, ever. Hell, don't feel bad. Now that I've endowed you with eighteen years of wisdom, I can continue; it was okay. I do this kind of poetry all the time, and it's really hit or miss, sometimes. This was more of a miss, but try it again. Don't be afraid of freedom, man.




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Mon Jun 27, 2005 7:15 pm
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This amazes me...




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Sat Jun 25, 2005 10:06 pm
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COOL :thumb:




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Thu Jun 23, 2005 1:37 am
Rei says...



"Rake the lawn." I don't get it, and I'm not sure I'm supposed to. But it amused me, and I always love a bit of randomness.




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Thu Jun 23, 2005 12:40 am
Sam says...



'"Daugher rake the lawn"'

haha!

Good stuff, man.




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Thu Jun 23, 2005 12:40 am
Elizabeth says...



Who is this seemingly demonic, obsessively explosive Jack Pretzel?... Prelustky




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Wed Jun 22, 2005 11:30 pm



I sorta liked it. It was very unusual and interesting. The "sound effects" were really unique, and it was very good, and the meaning is easy to understand. All I can say is that as a Jack Prelustky poem, its great.





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