Like a good girlfriend
I sit here and do nothing
While you don't talk to me
because you have chores to do
Like a good girlfriend,
I say I love you and apologize
While you say "It's OK,"
And never seem to say no more
Like a good girlfriend,
I would do anything for you
I would take a bullet for you
And would take your pain away
If I was gone would you cry?
Like a good girlfriend,
I don't question you
I am afriad of your answers
Like a good girlfriend
I don't ask why you will ignore me
Just to talk to her
Kind, sweet, loveable her,
Maybe I fear the answer
But just know,
Like a good girlfriend,
I care.
---DEDICATED TO GREG AND JANE----
Just know how I feel....
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Really good. Those first two lines could use work.
Thank you for it...
Yeah I could have done metter on those two lines, Jojo, but I just didn't know what to use to make it flow with the lingo of the po-po... poem...
O's!!!
The mindset of perhaps an impossibly good girlfriend perfectly and clearly put.
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But,
I sit here and do nothing
About any and everything
Don't you think this could be a bit better put to carry the meaning more explicitly?
Otherwise, it was so clear and heartfelt that I couldn't find a single fault with it( I am in 'love-for-criticism mood
This made me sad...
It's easily understandable and straight-to-the-point. Good job.
I liked this one. I thought it got it's message across very clearly, Well Done