If you don't want a critique, then why even post? Don't yell at Chandni for what she said, Critiques are opinions....I'm not in the mood for critique
I think it was the usual depression poem you get from teens, so there wasn't much special about it. You had the whole mirror metaphor, which was good though cliché. A good way to improve this would be too put some more feeling into it, feeling that the reader can feel as well so that it brings them into it. The goal of a poem is to make the reader feel, think, or look at something in a new light. To cause something. Poetry is sometimes mistaken as emotional rants in verse. (Not intended as a hit on your open, I do not consider this such.)
It was OK, but too.... "the usual"? I'm not sure how else to describe it.
This article might help you out: Emotional Poetry
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