Dear God, I am so sorry for everything I did, everything I've done.
Dear Sweet Jesus, please forgive me.
Hail Mary, Mother of God.
To Colton:
He called the quits said this was it and left me in the dust.
Bloody hell I am so angry and I'm so sorry forgive me please!
I feel so sorry, sad, and lost, I can't face my life anymore.
I can't face you anymore. I don't want you.
Until I get my act straight and am forgiven, my state is sad.
To Roy:
I thought you wanted to date me, I thought you liked me ...
But I guess I was looking and thinking about it the wrong way.
I won't forget last night even though you might.
Here is my last breath from me to you.
It's bye.
But...
Only after I say thinks for making me happy for a moment. If just only.
Good luck to you forever.
I feel there will never be an us.
I cheated on my boyfriend and I feel terrible about it. It's all over and I have to be loyal from now on. Look at my poem like this, if I feel guilty, and I never do, then if you cheat you might too. (Damn Dr. Seuss rhymining...)
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Ahh my god! You're reading all my angst when I was 13... terrible terrible! Ahh! It's like torture! ahh!
This is a good poem Liz, it seemed like it came right from the heart.
Umm... Your "poem" is good though its not the type of thing I'd show to people on YWS. But I guess its a good way to fell apoletic about what you've done. Personally, this piece looks as though it could be turned into a song or something. The beginning with all the pleading and begging sounds a bit wierd to me. Perhaps you should come to realize forgiveness probably won't come.
Well, this is a good poem--as far as the people you are speaking of are concerned. I personally, was able to enjoy considering you've told me a lot about these situations. However, everyone else who may not know you as well as I do, are most likely to be confused, and your poem will be left dry and laid down to be picked over...unappreciated...
But then again, I am not everyone else and neither do I know what's going on in everyone else's head...
I guess this is where I shut up. : Shrugs :