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Interesting poem. I'm not really into romance, but as far as I can tell (which isn't very far) it looks good, for what it is.

Just a few grammatical and spelling errors, such as:

"Look in my heart, I warn you," - That first comma should probably be a semi-colon, and you might want to say "into" instead of "in".
"It's a secrete that makes me feel so tall." - "Secrete" is actually spelled "secret".
"The thought vexes me, leaves my heart askew." - In the lines above, you seemed resigned to the facts, and here you're suddenly objecting, so maybe add "though," after "me,".
"Every night, alone I am." - I see how you were trying to make this line rhyme with the rest of the stanza, but it doesn't really make sense.
"Alone to my thoughts," - You might want to say "with" instead of "to". It just makes more sense.
"Saved back for a rainy day." - It would sound a little better if you take out "back" or say "Held back" instead.
"I was your pray." - Actually, in this context, it would be spelled "prey".

Hope that made sense and wasn't just me rambling on. And sorry to sound so critical. Have fun and keep writing!

Hey there Speakerskat here to write a review for you!

Very intresting and indepth, I could really feel the intense emotions woven intop this poem and I found it very relatable ( sadly). The only thing I just didn't think flowed to well was the second to last stanza, it felt a little strained. Maybe if you made the first two lines in that stanza longer , but thats just my opinion :3

But this was a very moving and overall well formatted piece and even though the topic was ment to be sad I enjoed reading it because of this. I loved the third and the sixth stanzas cause that is so true ( the statments you made there). Just a wonderful job and aside from that I really don't have anything else to say.

Kepp it up
Kit

Hello, Knight Wolf here to review your poem for you!

This poem was amazing, it clearly portrayed its meaning, and everything about it just interconnects.

The word choices are a little cliché, but that doesn't mean anything bad.

The only grammatical error I can see is a really minor one.

Ive been pushed away.

Hi SJ, Dream with review on your poem.
This poem was successful in terms of the theme with effective diction. These words are often used in poem with the theme of broken heart and disappointment in regards to love. Title choice also suitable, for you give up on these feelings and you are defeated.

This heart? It's nothing to me. Take it, I allow.

I can't tell you I like you at all.
It's a secrete that makes me feel so tall.
If you knew, I would start to fall.

I(')ve been pushed away.-mistyping?