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No One

by Chevy


No One
Is a nobody
But not everyone
Is a somebody.
And I dedicate this poem,
For the ones who killed,
At Columbine High School.


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Fri Aug 09, 2013 9:55 pm
Willard wrote a review...



Confusing
Underrated poem
I give it a five




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Sun Mar 31, 2013 2:48 am
bandgeek101 wrote a review...



Please don't be offended by my critique, it's just I have strong feelings for Columbine.

.I don't quite understand this poem. Who is it dedicated to? That line didn't flow very well, though the rest of the poem is lovely and meaningful. I like how you worded it, you are definitely a skilled poet.




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Sat Feb 04, 2006 8:29 am
Shine says...



Short,sweet and meaningful.It was a good idea to dedicate it to them.Good job :)




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Sat Feb 04, 2006 4:56 am
xanthan gum wrote a review...



yeah, ok, this needs flesh for me to bite into. right now it's a very short, sweet cracker that is more like a poetic statement with line breaks than a poem. but....like i said, it's a good cracker. like a ritz...

alright, i'll stop now. very good dedication.




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Sat Feb 04, 2006 1:40 am
Snip Snip says...



It's a sweet poem, but it's a little random, you could flesh it out, and make it even sweeter <3 :D




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Sat Feb 04, 2006 12:37 am
honeybee says...



What a sweet poem! It IS short though. Other than that, well done 8)




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Thu Dec 09, 2004 7:46 pm
Nate wrote a review...



Short but sweet. I'd suggest, though, adding in a line between the end of the poem and the dedication. And since I'm not sure if everyone here knows what Columbine was (a very significant number of members come from outside the United States) I found a link that can explain it:

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Columbine_ ... l_massacre

But like I said, this is short but sweet. The poem says a lot without having to delve into dense stanzas that, in the end, mean little anyway. Moreover, the seeming contradiction in the poem is thought provoking.

Well done.





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