Chevy wrote:Laughter is softer
Tears come closer
Right here at the beginning of the second part you repeated and that bugs me so much, because your poems tend to be strong and they flow, but this one seemed forced. It threw me off, I know I'm asking alot, but maybe you could change it or omit it all together and have an even shorter poem.
I liked the rest though! A whole lot, if that helps.
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