Hi, hope you're good Morgan.
I was very excited to have found essentially a piece of YWS history. As my knowledge tells me, your story was published a few days under seventeen years ago. That's about four years before I even existed. That giddiness aside, let me get reviewing.
First of all, I sort of agree. The whole opening reads in an awkward and cliched manner, something I associate with this very 2000s era. I think the ambiguity of the premise comes off as forced and it is something I would like improved.
However, mostly, I enjoyed reading it. Another positive would be how easy it is to just breeze through the story - it is easy to digest, so to say.
I really like the descriptiveness of it all, and I feel it really ties the narrative together.
In all, I am definitely enjoying reading this piece.
I hope you are good wherever you are. It has been 12 years since I have seen activity from you, and I speak for all of us when I say we would love to see you back, writing and posting beautifully.
Points: 166
Reviews: 32
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