It's a place I can hardly remember,
But a place I would like to be,
A dream that I once had,
A hope I can't just imagine.
Everything I hate,
Is looking like everything I love,
Pleasure and delight--
Are bleeding through sadness.
A new event takes place--
Discarding the original.
All that is old,
Now converted and transformed.
I take a look around--
Resulting in confusion.
It's like someone has come and replanted;
Making things fresh and new.
I can't help but wonder.
How did all this happen and when?
Then you tap me on my shoulder,
I turned around and then I see,
How could I have not realized,
That all along it was you?
This poem is such a rollercoaster ride. I feel as though the main character goes through some sort of depression and is in some sort of gray area. Where everything she loves she hates and I guess somehow misses the past but by the end is happy with the Futures they have with another person I feel as though they are optimistic and willing to experience new things. This was well put together. Very well done good job
I really enjoyed the poem. Sometimes things aren't meant to make sense; especially at two am. However, this was really well thought out and I liked it a lot!!!
In this quote specifically, but all throught I think there are tense errors.
Chevy wrote:
Then you tap me on my shoulder,
I turned around and then I see,
Its actually pretty good - especially for a 2am-poem lol (I know what those can be like...[shudders] I wish they all turned out so well hehehe). It reminds me of this sone I really like - I think its called "Deliver Me" or something. I heard it on a TV ad 
But anyway my point being that I really like the poem as well. Just one thing, "I turned around and then I see" should be "I turn around and then I see", to keep with the present tense. Otherwise, great job. I like the concept and the sentiment behind this one.
i wrote this poem @ some 2am so if it doesnt make a lot of sense,then you'll know why:-)
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