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Drowning (Just the chorus)

by Chevy


I wasn't waving,
I was drowning,
In a sea of all
That I'd done wrong.

Did you think I was laughing?
When I was actually crying?
How could you not see,
That I was dying?
How could you not see,
That I was dying?


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Wed May 18, 2005 7:21 pm
Harley says...



it's a bit short to critique, but verses would either make it or break it (forgive the cliched phrase) i'd love to read them, too.




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Sun Apr 24, 2005 7:30 pm
Sgt.Pepper says...



I think verses would be great to, only because you can get a better idea of what the chorus is about by it's verses. Don't like you decide if you want to buy a house by looking at its surrondings.




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Mon Apr 04, 2005 1:20 am
filmcanister says...



yes. i think verses would be wonderful.




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Thu Mar 31, 2005 3:17 pm
Duskglimmer says...



Awesome! Are there verses to go with it? I'd love to read them if there were...




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Sat Mar 26, 2005 5:05 pm
Lollipop wrote a review...



Cool! If that song came out I'd buy it! Wow! :D :D :D





Love is so short, forgetting is so long.
— Pablo Neruda