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Drowning (Just the chorus)

by Chevy

I wasn't waving,
I was drowning,
In a sea of all
That I'd done wrong.

Did you think I was laughing?
When I was actually crying?
How could you not see,
That I was dying?
How could you not see,
That I was dying?

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Wed May 18, 2005 7:21 pm
Harley says...

it's a bit short to critique, but verses would either make it or break it (forgive the cliched phrase) i'd love to read them, too.

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Sun Apr 24, 2005 7:30 pm
Sgt.Pepper says...

I think verses would be great to, only because you can get a better idea of what the chorus is about by it's verses. Don't like you decide if you want to buy a house by looking at its surrondings.

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Mon Apr 04, 2005 1:20 am
filmcanister says...

yes. i think verses would be wonderful.

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Thu Mar 31, 2005 3:17 pm
Duskglimmer says...

Awesome! Are there verses to go with it? I'd love to read them if there were...

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Sat Mar 26, 2005 5:05 pm
Lollipop wrote a review...

Cool! If that song came out I'd buy it! Wow! :D :D :D

Love is so short, forgetting is so long.
— Pablo Neruda