it's a bit short to critique, but verses would either make it or break it (forgive the cliched phrase) i'd love to read them, too.
I wasn't waving,
I was drowning,
In a sea of all
That I'd done wrong.
Did you think I was laughing?
When I was actually crying?
How could you not see,
That I was dying?
How could you not see,
That I was dying?
it's a bit short to critique, but verses would either make it or break it (forgive the cliched phrase) i'd love to read them, too.
I think verses would be great to, only because you can get a better idea of what the chorus is about by it's verses. Don't like you decide if you want to buy a house by looking at its surrondings.
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