I would post the chords but I don't feel like it. Just know that it's in the key of C.
Intro
Ah Ah, Ah Ah, Ah Ah, Ah Ah
Verse One
dance the night away with your writings on your hand
you wish to be closer to what your mind commands
the rain pours down when the clouds open their net
and you feel so dry when you're soaking wet
Chorus
letting go while the others are chancing
sitting down while the rest are dancing
that's you with your excuse for art
making photographic memories with your photgraphic heart.
Verse Two
write the night away until your fingers are tense
the words spill on the page but they make no sense
lying awake all night is now a crime
and you're the last one sleep but the last one alive
Bridge
go old school everything
before there was a lens
take time for original
somewhere deep within
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I absolutly love the way you used figurative language to portray everything. It also has very good rhythm and I can hear the song being song in my head. I think that the bridge does not fit well with the rest of the song. Except for the Bridge I loved the whole song.
Disclaimer: I know nothing about the technical aspects of playing and/or singing music, but I'm a music fan and I know what I like when I hear it.
) Okay, now the last stanza makes more sense. 
Very pretty. It flowed well, and I could almost hear the song playing in my head. I love the last lines to each stanza - you know how to end each with a great image!
Oh, and in the last line of Verse 2, I think you left out the "a" in asleep, but that's just a technicality.
The last stanza ... the last stanza I'm not too crazy about. As a poem, the last line of Verse 2 would make a great ending, but this isn't a poem is it? (Rhetorical question, I know it's a song.) "Bridge" isn't part of that stanza is it? I'm sorry, I thought it was at first (I'm a little slow on the uptake sometimes
Overall, I liked it a lot. Nice choice of words, rhythmn, imagery, the whole shabang! Great job.