I think I'll have to agree with Nate about taking out all the "likes". I think that would make it better, almost deeper somehow. At least, that's how it seems to me. I liked the point that you were making, about the things we'll never understand. And using contrasting things to try and get that point across.
I, also, don't particularly care for short poems, but, unlike Jack, I liked reading this. Partially because it was well-written, and partially because I understood it, which is always a plus.
Anywho. Well done!
xoxo
-Caitlin
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