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coke and pain

by Chevy


Drink Coke and try again...

Can't remember the last time
you peered under a bottle cap
and actually won.

Glare at the receipt
no refunds, no returns
so shake the bottle
and let it explode.

Everything you do has reason
But nothing you do is right.

Drink Pain and try again...


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Sun Jul 24, 2005 12:30 am
Ieatworms says...



Nice modern flare




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Thu Jul 21, 2005 9:54 pm
Bobo says...



Wow, this is great. Sorry for my lack of words, I'm feeling rather silent right now.




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Thu Jul 21, 2005 9:47 pm
sabradan says...



seems rather dark and depressing. But the wording and imagery are nice.




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Thu Jul 21, 2005 7:15 pm
Chevy says...



Thank you so much! Yes...it is depressing. For some reason I was going for that. *shrugs*




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Thu Jul 21, 2005 7:01 pm
Rei says...



Well, that was depressing. But it's a well-expressed idea and Coke is a great metephore for it.





The brain is wider than the sky.
— Emily Dickenson