Why do I do this to myself?
I'm causing myself my own pain.
It's no one's fault except my own.
It was me that put myself here.
I looked into the mirror,
There stood the person to blame,
The person that had been behind it all,
I'm the one who's ruined my life.
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Hello! I thought I better leave a review! It’s short and doesn’t bore the reader, lets splash in!
This poem carries lots of emotions from within, and I love how it starts with a question. The burden of fault weighs heavily on the narrator, and sometimes, it’s nice to let those feelings out through writing.
I think maybe it would be nice if you added why the narrator is blaming the self, and what happened before that makes them think that. It is already really good, just a few minor details <3
I love the free verse, with no rhymes, just expression and it reads along smoothly on your tongue.
Overall this poem really touched me, and I look forward to reading and seeing more of your works!
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Hii! I am reviewing this because why not
tbh i don't have much time because i have to sleep but i need the points ToT
This poem is very short and yet it still hits deep. it creates a mood of negativity towards yourself which is very relatable to many people even in 2025. but yeah... i don't have much to say i am sorry ToT
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Hello, I'm Rain, so here is what I have to say:
I think after this stanza, or somewhere, you need to say what it is that you are doing to yourself... Right now all we know is that you are depressed because of something you caused.
I think you should add more to this, right now all there is is two stanza's telling us that you believe you ruined your life. Thats it. I think you should add in why you think that why, what you did to ruin your life, how it feels, use metaphors and similies and the works... That could make this a really great poem...
Sorry for the bad spelling, I don't have a spell check...
Hope this helps,
~Rain~
I like the first stanza, there is a flow to it that's kind of weird and magical. I think the sentiment of being in battle with yourself is universal, and there's a "realness" to the language here that makes it interesting. It's cool how the tense changes from present to past to present. The poem is to-the-point yet thoughtfully, dreamily constructed.
hello there... i like the poem...it have lots of meaning...
I'm the one who's ruined my life.~in this part, i suggest you to change it to "I'm the one who ruined my life." or "I'm the one who's ruining my life." that's just a suggestion. it's still up to you if you'll change it or not.
I like this! Wow! I didn't find anything wrong with it, and it was really good.
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Hey I really like you lyric/song/poem
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Its a bit short yet still effective I'm no good and saying whats good and whats not I just personally like it escpecially the last verse