Young Writers Society

You must've been seriously bored when you wrote this @Eros! XD
I love it! <3

Ready? Okay............. I get that you were really really very very bored when you wrote this. It felt like a cup of coffee for me , BOOM like a punch in the face knocking me awake. Can I ask you something? What happened to mom at last? Did the boy kill her? I'm sorry It seriously felt like that to me. The mom doesn't respond to the boy anymore so I figured she was dead. I love the way mom says at last 'get more bored'. I could get more bored well go and get more bored.

Hey Eros it's AshleyDashley here for a review!

First off I like the way it is in conversation between mother and daughter. It makes it funny that way. I could totally visualize what was going on here and imagined a little kid complaining to her/his mom. I can also relate to having done this.

Mom, I am bored.

Play games.

I did that. Mom, I am bored.

Watch T.V.

I did that. Mom, I am bored.

Swim in the pool.

I did that. Mom, I am bored.

Listen music.

I did that. Mom, I am bored.

Go and dance.

I did that. Mom, I am bored.

Write something.

I did that. Mom, I am bored.

Call up a friend.

I did that. Mom, I am bored.

Get more bored.

I did that. Mom, I am bored!

I am bored!!

I am BORED!!!

Hello here!
Just saw that as something new as an idea.
I actually had not checked any works of yours these days and I feel guilty about it but well, school and other jazz.
I actually do not have ocmplains about this work because it is funny and totally okay the way it is.
I do not know why I read it in a kidish kind of a voice all the time. XD
I do not think this is a work that need a serious grammar or other kind of a check up because it is more funny than something that needs the grammar and punctuation to look good. I could only tell you to replace 'T.V' with 'TV'.
Anyways, good job and I hope you have a nice day/eve.

I think this is a cute, fun poem. Good job!

hmmmmmmmmm *start nibbling on a pencil* it is good and i like it as u kept he whole theme which is mom i am bored well i can see that but maybe we can do something with this poem and make it a little more grand but i cant think of anything to add.except at the end take out the last two mom so it more flowing as he screams how bored he is or she for we know he talking to mom he doesnt need to repeat
I did that. Mom, I am bored
I am bored!!

I am BORED!!!
i will gadly read and review some more of your work so as u told me never cease to write and give us the poems we love