Hey Eros!
This is an interesting piece of poetry as your concepts are fixed on how the world isn't the same without a special someone or something.
Content wise, your concepts are clear with discussing and providing comparisons to how without this special somebody, the world won't function properly. I see this as a case of stereotyping, as in people need to be like this in order for things to be normal. Readers can see this as good or even bad stereotyping.
Grammar and Spelling, is good. Be careful to check over your spelling, like "guitar" in the last stanza. Otherwise, everything is intact.
Structure wise, you've organized your content into stanzas of three equal lines. Each stanza is significant, as you discuss each aspect of the world not being the same without this special someone.
The content is coherent, as simply you're providing examples of how the world isn't the same without your other half/special somebody/special something.
Literary Devices are effectively used in your descriptions. I am able to spot adjectives, similes, metaphors, and personification.
My personal rating for this work is 4.4/5
I'll add a "like" since your work got 80%+ from me
Points: 743
Reviews: 32
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