I see truthfulness in your eyes;
Truthfulness towards your work,
Truthfulness towards yourself,
Truthfulness towards everyone.
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I see deep oceans in your eyes;
Ocean of kindness
Ocean of beauty
Ocean of love.
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I see luster in your eyes
Luster of honesty
Luster of intelligence
Luster of hard work.
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I see heaven in your eyes
Heaven of God
Heaven of care
Heaven of all worlds.
These are the reasons why I always look into your eyes.
You are great than the greatest for me!
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Very touching, Eros. Like to see more of your works posted up here.
Oh! Thank you, Sunset! I will post more whenver I get time.
Oh! Thank you, Sunset! I will post more whenver I get time.
Great!
You can have a look at " The most beautiful dream" or " love and relationship" or the other works till that time!
Okay! I'll try
This is a beautiful and honest poem, and it clearly shows that the speaker has strong feelings towards the person being addressed in there. You mentioned the traits that attract the speaker. Your poem’s cute and has a soft tone to it. For that reason, I found it engaging. And, the last line – gosh! It’s so sincere and heart touching. Excellent work! Well done, and keep writing!
Thank for the review Artstyx!
No problem!
Hi!
I like this song here because it sounds very soft and sweet. I really liked the flow of the song. I like the "truthfulness" part. I think that is very encouraging to others. How it inspires readers. The only think I want to point out to you is the word "lustre". It's supposed to be spelled "luster".
You did a good job. Never give up!!!
Thank You Fanta!
Big mistake!
You should put something to make this apart from the poem.
Anyway, hi, your poem was beautiful, everything in this thing was meaningful even they were simple!
Next, typo alert!
It should be truthfulness, right?
Moving, the punctuations. You should edit this part a bit. I could only hope to recite your poem with non-stop breath.
LAST!
Those ARE the reasonS on why I'd always look into your eyes.
I know you understand your mistake in this, right? you stated many reasonS on why the persona look into 'your' eyes.
Overall, yes this was good, keep writing, you said you want to add more, right? so please write, I would love to read more!
Thanks for this and I hope this helped and sorry, if I made any mistake or mistakes!
Yet, keep writing!
Truthfulness is correct. I wrote it in a hurry--It was the time to go to school but I wanted to post this. Correct! I there are many reasons. Thanks for pointing out the mistakes. We learn from our mistakes!
Regarding "Dear Readers, I will add some more to it whenever I get time."
It is not getting spaced . I mean to say that I tried to make space in between this line and the line below it. But it is not happening...
Try:
[quote=%u201Dcleverclogs%u201D]Poetry formatting protip: In the YWS publisher, instead of just pressing "enter" to write a new line, press the "shift" key along with the "enter" key...[/quote]
I tried to do it....But it did not work. May be I think I couldnt do it properly because I am not ood in understanding computers...
Hi, I'm dark!
Thanks for creating such an amazing piece of art!
I'm gonna start by saying that this was a very enchanting poem to read, and I'm sure the one you wrote it for would love it! It's sweet the way you describe the wonderful traits of this person, and that you portray them as what you see in their eyes. You say you'll add to it, but I think it's fine the way it is. It's short, definitely sweet, flawless. I'll definite be taking some inspiration from this.
~The dark one.
Thank you for the review dark!